Just using the image provided by kumiko. Lazy to make another new one. I marked it with the colored ink.



U are troubling with problems in writing an essay especially in constructing a sentence. Sometimes u tend to use complex sentences (which is good) but u merged a sentence into another sentence wrongly. The flaws can be seen entirely in almost all ur complex sentences. However, dont use too many simple sentences because such sentences do not attract the markers attentions. Try to use complex sentences more often but with proper way. Use the 'and', 'but', 'because', and etc to join ur sentences.

Most importantly, avoid minor errors such as spelling mistakes and grammatical errors. What I can see from ur essay is that u are confused about where to use the present tense and past tense. This should be fixed if u put on more time to check ur essay before submission.

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Added on March 20, 2009, 11:49 pmThumbs up to our Add Maths buddy, Zel! (Even though I dont bother looking at it to avoid my head from exploding )

This post has been edited by Elven: Mar 21 2009, 03:00 AM

His parents are well-educated. Yes they are. Up until now, they are still educated. Right? Not that during they were still in the process of pursuing higher education makes them well-educated ONLY at that time.

Not just because u are referring to the camp as past, that u cant use present tense in ur essay. It relies on the context itself.

This post has been edited by Elven: Mar 21 2009, 12:27 AM

Like what kumiko said, pls refer to my previous editted post.

Ya, unless they got hit in the head by something heavy. Hahaha

Belum. Now dota la my kumiko.

Experiements are not something that u should 'hafal'. But it's more to involving and understanding. If u put more attention on the experiments during classes, u would have better and more ideas on asnwering paper 3. True they are probably hundreds of experiments, but that wont be a problem if u go through all the experiments in the classes. In fact, aswering paper 3 will need u to imagine. Just imagine what u have experimented during classes and write the procedure down. It's as simple as that.

Last year's Physics Experiment was not weird lah. I did the experiment though during form 4. It was a force exertion by a rod (wooden/metal) onto a lump of plasticine of definite shape. If u guys ever heard about a practical book entitled Physics 2U, then u could find the experiment in there.

BC is bahasa cina kah?

At a glance, perfect liao.

This post has been edited by Elven: Mar 22 2009, 12:07 AM

Im not sure about the brackets too. Other than that, I love the essay.

Then we can publish the essay on LYN as general guidance for SPM-ers.

Is that a Do-My-Homework Thread?

Via surgery.

I already finished vector, trigo and stuffs related to all subjects.

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Added on April 2, 2009, 8:39 pmIf u have the time to study Geography ur ownself or get a tutor then I recommend u to take it. Back when I was in Form 4, I'd been always thinking of taking the subject. I even had finished study all the Form 4 chapters. But then my efforts had gone to waste since there were only 3 Geography teachers in my school and they were so busy with their own classes, works and stuffs that they had no extra time to entertain me with all the courseworks. So in the end, I excluded Geography from my SPM subjects. I registered for only 10. It was a super duper easy subject but then I had to let go of it because of the mere courseworks. Well, I could just register for the subject but then I decided not to in case I couldn't score A. That's why there are courseworks to help the students to score.

This post has been edited by Elven: Apr 2 2009, 08:39 PM

Walao Chemistry Form 4 Syllabus...

If u are doing a continuous writing type of essay, u should put in a few proverbs or idioms. Some situations/feelings can hardly be expressed or told with mere normal sentences. So, proverbs and idioms speak volume about the expressions, not to mention it does help u to boost up your marks.

I can give you my solute for your essay. However, allow me to direct a question and my opinions.

What do u mean by the bolded sentence? Are u saying that the waste materials from a river disposed by the people are washed away to other rivers, or the waste materials from the dumping site are washed away to the rivers? Your sentence will make some examiners confused though. Try not to use resemblance by putting some words with the ' ' sign. Instead, just use the correct word which gives a direct meaning.

And I don't really think the eruption of volcanoes does fairly contribute to water pollution. The only pollutants that the eruptions emit are the smoke and dust which make the air polluted. In fact, the lava makes the soil and water more futile for plantation though.

Just my 0.02.

Edit: I only read your first essay. The second and third essay, I didn't due to laziness. By the way, the introduction looks very familiar to me.

This post has been edited by Elven: Apr 7 2009, 12:07 AM

That's what I said. A confusing sentence.

By the way, are u malay or chinese?

This post has been edited by Elven: Apr 6 2009, 11:35 PM

The bolded sentence is confusing though. If you are malay, then I'm not suprised you can do the BM essay this well. If you are chinese, then I wonder why your English essay is not as splendid as BM essay. As far as I concern, most chineses use English in their daily communication. No offense.

This post has been edited by Elven: Apr 6 2009, 11:44 PM

Ohhh shoot, I'd just realized that he said it!

Yeah correct. And those emitted from the volcano are called flying debris, and what's flowing with and at the same time melted in the lava is called molten debris.

Soil erosion.