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post May 15 2008, 11:20 AM, updated 18y ago

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To my beloved Sean,

First gift from Nana to Sean. Gift which contents of love and best wishes from Nana, hopefully Sean will success in his up coming business.


After my training, finally I got part of my paid and bought a wallet (braun buffel) to my bf, we just started out for not long, 3 mnths +, and now I would like to give him the gift attached with a text, he is going to start out his own business soon, so would like to wish him but found out there are something wrong with my text. I have no idea how to make it better but I feel something wrong.

Help needed to make my text more presentable and I dont wish to pass him face to face, is there anyway I can surprise him? No creativity in this kind of things.

This post has been edited by feyhime: May 15 2008, 12:04 PM
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post May 15 2008, 12:04 PM

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QUOTE(Peppy @ May 15 2008, 11:20 AM)
To my beloved Sean,

First gift from Nana to Sean. Gift which contents of love and best wishes from Nana, hopefully my honey Sean will success in his up coming business. From your darling Nana "Love U"


After my training, finally I got part of my paid and bought a wallet (braun buffel) to my bf, we just started out for not long, 3 mnths +, and now I would like to give him the gift attached with a text, he is going to start out his own business soon, so would like to wish him but found out there are something wrong with my text.  I have no idea how to make it better but I feel something wrong.

Help needed to make my text more presentable and I dont wish to pass him face to face, is there anyway I can surprise him? No creativity in this kind of things.
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U left out some words.. wub.gif


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post May 15 2008, 02:09 PM

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QUOTE(@lice~~ @ May 15 2008, 01:32 PM)
U left out some words..  wub.gif
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Don'teven know how we start out, we never call each other in this way before, tried to do so, but find out weird. Untill now we still call each other by name, Sean, Nana, Sean, Nana sweat.gif sweat.gif sweat.gif So so so not romantic at all
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post May 15 2008, 02:15 PM

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If i am starting a business soon i will never expect that my gf will be my first customer. Hmmm i think that gift would be more suprise.

Anyway you could put sentence like support him.
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post May 15 2008, 02:18 PM

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don't you think it's a bit too formal?

and sometimes even a short note can make it really sweet. just need to insert words that are meaningful to both of you. maybe you can make a metaphore or something. for instance, because it's a wallet, an item he will bring anywhere he goes, write a note something like 'so you'll know a part of me is always with you'. and yada yada, something like that. a bit corny, but sweet.
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post May 15 2008, 02:31 PM

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QUOTE(barrylin @ May 15 2008, 02:15 PM)
If i am starting a business soon i will never expect that my gf will be my first customer. Hmmm i think that gift would be more suprise.

Anyway you could put sentence like support him.
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Yea, that's why i am asking for opinion so I can improve my text hmm.gif

QUOTE(AtMostFear @ May 15 2008, 02:18 PM)
don't you think it's a bit too formal?

and sometimes even a short note can make it really sweet. just need to insert words that are meaningful to both of you. maybe you can make a metaphore or something. for instance, because it's a wallet, an item he will bring anywhere he goes, write a note something like 'so you'll know a part of me is always with you'. and yada yada, something like that. a bit corny, but sweet.
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i used to deal with the media ppl, my text used to be formal. as i had said previously, I knew there was something wrong, but i dunno where cry.gif your opinion is a good one for me to refer, thanks ya notworthy.gif

I am even worst than a male doh.gif
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QUOTE(Peppy @ May 15 2008, 02:09 PM)
Don'teven know how we start out, we never call each other in this way before, tried to do so, but find out weird. Untill now we still call each other by name, Sean, Nana, Sean, Nana sweat.gif  sweat.gif  sweat.gif  So so so not romantic at all
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Then start from ur note.. start use those sweet sweet words.. for sure, he wil love.. if u find honey n darling a bit too chicken then try to use dear then.. remember to put a few love symbol on it too.. wub.gif

When start paktor-ing, my bf n i oso calling each other by name... n forget when n how, we now calling each other dear..


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post May 15 2008, 04:26 PM

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Last time when i bought my bf a wallet, i hide the wallet somewhere, i left some papers(clues) which written the direction to get to next stop, to get another paper(clues)...each paper direct him to the next stop....n i was not around( because i was in hometown)
u can try if u dun think it is childish or doin nonsenses..hahaha
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i'm a guy but if the situation is reversed and i'm giving it to my gf i would write:-

To my love Nana,

My first gift bought out of love for you. With your business starting soon, I wish everytime you see this wallet, you work extra hard and earn more to buy me something better.

Loving and wishing you well,
Sean

P/S I'll always be there for you
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post May 15 2008, 04:57 PM

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QUOTE(mia-patra @ May 15 2008, 04:26 PM)
Last time when i bought my bf a wallet, i  hide the wallet somewhere, i left some papers(clues) which written the direction to get to next stop, to get another paper(clues)...each paper direct him to the next stop....n i was not around( because i was in hometown)
u can try if u dun think it is childish or doin nonsenses..hahaha
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Lol.. You looks familiar gal.. i cant do so cause we both stay in diff place and i dun really know his housemate blink.gif

QUOTE(jceh83 @ May 15 2008, 04:31 PM)
i'm a guy but if the situation is reversed and i'm giving it to my gf i would write:-

To my love Nana,

My first gift bought out of love for you. With your business starting soon, I wish everytime you see this wallet, you work extra hard and earn more to buy me something better.

Loving and wishing you well,
Sean

P/S I'll always be there for you
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Hmm.. This will pressure him??? I'm not sure.. I afraid it will. Cause he is doing hard to start out with his stuff rite now.


Plan to surprise him by next tuesday before I am back to hometown at wednesday icon_rolleyes.gif Cause the current one he is using now he has been using it for long time and nt nice d. Since he gonna do his business soon, i bought him a leather one so its presentable, i think so hmm.gif
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post May 15 2008, 05:03 PM

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Hi Sean,

I worked hard and saved all my allowances for this gift. It may be a small gift but it something that you could use everyday and be always with you like how I would want be with you always.

Your lovely
Nana ...
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post May 15 2008, 05:19 PM

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@whoopa : simple and nice. thanks.

will come out with something... hmm... let me see.. all here thanks ya... done d, show you all. but will not be vy vy romantic la... i'm not that kind after all shakehead.gif
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post May 15 2008, 06:47 PM

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To my darling,

TIs is first gift from Nana to Darling. The gift might seem small for darling but It do contain all the love and wishes from Nana for darling..Nana hope darling will like it as It will be there and accompany darling jz like Nana alway there for darling every second of Nana life..

Your Lovely....Nana

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post May 15 2008, 07:44 PM

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QUOTE(Darren @ May 15 2008, 06:47 PM)
To my darling,

TIs is first gift from Nana to Darling. The gift might seem small for darling but It do contain all the love and wishes from Nana for darling..Nana hope darling will like it as It will be there and accompany darling jz like Nana alway there for darling every second of Nana life..

Your Lovely....Nana

*Hope it help  tongue.gif
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wub.gif wub.gif wub.gif i such a failure for born to be a gal. Dare not le, later he will tease me one cry.gif

my text will be:

To my love Sean,

Gift from Nana to Sean which content of love and best wishes. The wallet represents of Nana, a small gift but it could be something you gonna use everyday, so no matter where you've been, what you are facing, I will always be there with you. Last but not least, I would like to wish Sean success for your coming up business

Loving and wishing you well,
Nana

P/s: Don't try to be naughty, cause i am with you all the time tongue.gif

The one i bold sounds a bit formal, please help me to make it more sweet and lifely. Thanks again to all notworthy.gif
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QUOTE(Peppy @ May 15 2008, 07:44 PM)
wub.gif  wub.gif  wub.gif i such a failure for born to be a gal. Dare not le, later he will tease me one  cry.gif

my text will be:

To my love Sean,

Gift from Nana to Sean which content of love and best wishes. The wallet represents of Nana, a small gift but it could be something you gonna use everyday, so no matter where you've been, what you are facing, I will always be there with you. Last but not least, I would like to wish Sean success for your coming up business

Loving and wishing you well,
Nana

P/s: Don't try to be naughty, cause i am with you all the time  tongue.gif

The one i bold sounds a bit formal, please help me to make it more sweet and lifely. Thanks again to all notworthy.gif
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why not, i would like to wish you/my love sean? hmm.gif
the p/s is cute. laugh.gif
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post May 15 2008, 11:20 PM

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QUOTE(Peppy @ May 15 2008, 07:44 PM)

To my love Sean,

Gift from Nana to Sean which content of love and best wishes. The wallet represents of Nana, a small gift but it could be something you gonna use everyday, so no matter where you've been, what you are facing, I will always be there with you. Last but not least, I would like to wish Sean success for your coming up business

Loving and wishing you well,
Nana

P/s: Don't try to be naughty, cause i am with you all the time  tongue.gif
y not try 2 call him abit sweet leh???
it alway feel good when ur loves call u in a sweet way biggrin.gif
me too prefer to been call darling by my loves 1..... rclxms.gif
it will only make it sweeter d

if u no confident bout wat i said,y dont d other forumer give her a suggestion?? tongue.gif
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post Jun 6 2008, 03:12 PM

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the use of 'me' and 'you', and things like 'my beloved', 'darling' etc sure sound better than just names. using names sound like pihak ketiga if you know what i mean.

be honest. be simple and true. this aint suppose to be hard wink.gif
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why are you talking about the two of you in third person? so impersonal.

To my beloved Sean,
Please accept this gift from me to you. It represents my love and I hope it will bring you good luck and success in your coming business.

Best Wishes,
Nana.
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QUOTE(spunkberry @ Jun 6 2008, 05:20 PM)
why are you talking about the two of you in third person? so impersonal.

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Yeah and why dont want to give face to face?

More like stalker in the move

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