Allow me to offer you my 2 cents based solely on your recent write up. I like most of what you write but find the act of reading it rather tedious. The reason for this is simple. You write too formally and you don't use many contractions. For example:



Could be written as "I don't experience the caffeine high".



"I called her later in the evening".



"He wasn't actually named after the country"

That's just a small basic tip. Try to be a lot more casual in your writing. In the book 'Strunk & White's Elements of Style' it is said that if you can say something in a simpler fashion, you should write it that way. Avoid lengthy prose for shorter ones. Of course you shouldn't write it like short sentences a child would write. The would just be monotonous. You should write like how you speak. That would be a lot more approachable for many readers. Take note one the point I made about contractions and how simple it is to improve your sentence with that small change.

2) Try to give a bit more description to the scene. The props. But don't go overboard. And try not to use long sentences punctuated with commas.



I looked around and noticed the mismatched furniture. The way the gaudy maroon tiled floors clashed with the sleek black chairs and tables. It was oddly... admirable. I suppose I have an affinity for those with an eccentric streak..............

The reason why you should give just a bit more description is to allow for the reader to imagine your writing. It's hard to imagine mismatched furniture. It's easier to see gaudy maroon tiles and sleek black chairs. Plus, it also say's something about your character, so it could be an important narrative piece.

3) You have to decide whether you're writing a blog post, or a story. This is just my personal opinion. I hate addressing the reader... especially if it's done too often (if it's story writing. Blog posts... go ahead and talk to the reader as much as you want). It should be used sparingly. Whenever stories address the reader, it often comes as a surprise, a twist that suddenly the writer is aware of the reader reading this first person tale. It can be nice if written to take into account the twist in the story. Not to constantly guess the reader's thoughts.

There. That's all the time I have to give you some tips. Overall, good job. A good example of first person writing are PG Wodehouse's Jeeves & Wooster series. You should check them out. Have fun writing.