hey folks. me and my friends wrote an original song, titled Never Saw it Coming. I am hoping if you folks can listen and give comments.

Just wanna get some unbiased feedback.

Thanks very much in advance



This post has been edited by MrSyakir: Apr 15 2014, 10:29 PM

a very linear progression, at least vocally, during my first listen to the song. a peak in a form of chorus could be added , and i cringe at the line 'when there wasn't much of a story at all' purely cause i can hear the vocalist struggled to pull that allllllllll.

could be improved, vocalist have it, maybe practice high range more, and project a less nasally sounds. all in all and impressive feat and good luck on your musical endeavor.

u want comment based on commercial appeal?
but i'm guessing this is just a rough demo...so...
1. i dunno where the chorus is...but i guess the 'she is used to...' line is some chorus attempt.
2. singer goes flat in certain places.
3. 0:42 when next verse comes in is very unnaturally spliced in.
4. song needs to breathe, give it some space.

keep it up

apa ini obsesi dengan 32?