QUOTE(HappyCrazyFreak @ Dec 19 2012, 11:39 PM)
There is no lasting happiness
And there is also no lasting sadness
Just like there is no lasting sunshine
When the rain or darkness claim the skyline
Just because of that one down moment
You leave me with a sense of abandonment
Is this your way of showing commitment?
Tell me, is it because I am too different?
Look, I am not asking for much
Just your love and support with a little touch
But if you really think we can't break through this wall
Then it's time to say goodbye, once and for all
Please tell me that I have actually improved in mycrapping poetry skills... Does this whole thing make sense to you? Anyway, I know that there is still a lot of room for improvement. Thank you very much!
I think you constrict yourself too much to rhymes. just let it flow man. don't worry about rhyming too much.And there is also no lasting sadness
Just like there is no lasting sunshine
When the rain or darkness claim the skyline
Just because of that one down moment
You leave me with a sense of abandonment
Is this your way of showing commitment?
Tell me, is it because I am too different?
Look, I am not asking for much
Just your love and support with a little touch
But if you really think we can't break through this wall
Then it's time to say goodbye, once and for all
Please tell me that I have actually improved in my
Added on December 19, 2012, 11:50 pmgonna sleep now. ciao everyone! sorry again Elaine...
goodnight happy jie jie.
This post has been edited by mooney: Dec 19 2012, 11:50 PM
Dec 19 2012, 11:47 PM

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