good attempt on story based photos.. here are my comments:

#1 i think it's more suitable for eerie/ghost story series.. just cant show the loneliness feel
#2 and #3 looks like normal portraiture style, just cant match with ur words.. models expressions don't match as well. expecially pic 3 she looks like wondering something only..
#4 needless to say.. too wordy
#5 it's too acting.. not natural
#6 what kissing has to do with the words there? and the pp..
#7 exposure isn't right
#8 u know what it is, it isn't sharp at all.. shaky or oof?
#9 no comment..

well.. to summarize that, don't think that story based photos is as easy as u just add some words there.. concentrate more on the models' mood expressions and actions as well..

from photography skills point of view, i leave it to all the sifus here.

thanks.. these are just my personal comments, no offence. apologies if i say things wrongly.

This post has been edited by Kensim00: Dec 26 2007, 11:58 AM

Pic 6 is superimposed?

here are the comments you wanted

#1 : i don't think the hallway has anything got to do with the feeling of loneliness... more like of those horror scenes from old buildings (as commented by a few others before this).
#3 : looks like she's waiting for someone rather than pondering/thinking, thus the lack of the emotions you initially wanted to potray...
#5 : looks a bit too dramatic... like those drama scenes and the old tactics people use...
#6 : a little too artificial... doesn't blend well with the background. and plus they're not les are they? =D
#7 : what does the picture has to do with the words in there? doesn't seem to potray what the words are trying to tell us... feels a bit weird (just personal preference though, no offence). and be careful with the girl's bra on the right...

and errr... hmmm, i realise the first few pictures are more to those lonelines/black and white 'feel' but as we continue on from #5, everything seems to be a little too "colourful".

all these are based solely on own opinion/thoughts... never meant to harm or to offend anyone

This post has been edited by caryn_eternal: Dec 28 2007, 11:54 AM

Hmm..I think he took the photos without planning to do a photo story. Very obvious..maybe next time you can plan first and then do a photoshoot for a photo story. Then there'll be more expressions. Preferably another lesbian story.

Btw, apart from the XtremeX lingerie gals, the gal in the red dress is one of the finer gals from your many many many shoots.

Hmm very mixed views here. Actually i created this series in an unintentional way, and almost all these pics were shot unscripted, and i have no intention to create a story out of this until when these 2 sporty girls decide to go alittle bit further to pose. Btw i didnt ask them to pose for the kiss though

There are some pics where i overdid it in purpose, for instance pic no 7 where i overexposed the pic in purpose. I try to put emotions out of it, from a dark and sad beginning, and at pic no 7 i overexposed it so i allow my subjects to go to a brighter place, means showing there a future further the path.

Well i know it wont work to some ppl here, perhaps my attempt isn;t good enough. Appreciate all comments and next, normal service is resumed with zyniz's photoshoot.

MOST OF THEM LOOK BETTER THAN YOU!

but 1 is male, the 2 is female ler.

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This post has been edited by travis_ckf: Jan 23 2008, 02:03 AM

- pics removed by request of the models -

This post has been edited by travis_ckf: Jan 23 2008, 02:03 AM

I see longkang at #6

Nice pics.. why all your pics have to be nose bleeding 1

Guys, we reeeaaally need a nose bleed emoticon, and a bloody messy one at that hahaha

why all macam head shoot.....

this is from the last series one woh
already cnc ma

Trav Trav , thanks for the photos


today oso is my first time tengok my own pic pic @ here

Ya i think they should have one, so mind anyone suggest to se7en?


I a sniper mah.


This series is different than the previous one, coz previous one is storybased. This one is straight forward.


Thanks alot. Btw i just delivered ur pics to pos express today so expect to receive by tmr.

Hope can get to c more of Ting Lihn picture soon.

Time to wrap up another series!

VOL 2: Winnie, and some random pics!

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10. One of my favs!


All is all! Enjoy!

The one in RED is supa hot.

Photos received

DOmo arIgaTo Trav TraV

This post has been edited by zyniz: Jan 13 2008, 02:19 AM

Winnie #5....a little cacat...i think you should pp a bit....cause doesn't look nice like this....